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    Posted: May 24 2007 at 9:07pm

yea that's true^ but he's a novice (everyone starts of as an ABC rapper). The best thing to do is to have what you wanna say in mind then just make it rhyme. it'll come easier after a while tho. Oh and try learning to use a Multisyllabic flow (not rhyming one syllable words. like bird and heard). Try something like this. ummm:

Girl you won't FIND ANOTHER cuz I'm the KIND OF BROTHER
That'll make ya heart melt and turn ya SPINE TO RUBBER

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Is it a poem or a rap? Sounds like a decent poem if its a track den it sounds like your an abc rapper. Basically just compiling words that rhyme.

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yea.....i kno....i'm tryin' to break dat habit
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good.but some stuff sounded like u said it just to rhyme
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i kno this is off topic but hear me out and tell me wut u think....
(this is only verse 1 and i'm a NOVICE)
                 
                 HER
She makes me weak when I walk
my voice creeks when I talk
Dam she's such a dyme
it's like she committed a crime
No son, don't think dat I'm lyin'
she'll have ur heart weepin' and cryin'
Worst mistake I made was sleepin'
when I shoulda been tryin'
to meet er heart to heart
wit da game dat I spit
usin' extracurricular wit
to get this chick that be fit.
 
 
 
I composed this on my ride to school
still holdin' b-boy crown @ school
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